Part V

FlameFish08's picture

After I managed my way upstairs to my room, I fell into bed. Immediately I fell into a deep sleep.
I was woken up later by someone coming into the room. I turned over and saw my roommate, Ashlei, drop her stuff on the floor. I was silent for a while, it didn’t seem like she noticed me.
Finally, she turned around and saw me lying down.
“What the-,


sophia's picture

More... please!!

Or was that the end.. I hope not
This is great, every part of it, ... totally engaging and I really wanna know what happens... I wish i could write like this, coz although i can do description etc. I can never think of a decent plot! Thankyou so much for sharing it :D

FlameFish08's picture

here it is

i didnt think people were actually reading it any more, so i just stopped...sorry! i do have some more which i will definitely post, but theres not too much more. i am kinda slowing down on the plot cuz i have to choose where i want my story to go. i will keep posting whatever i have, and any tips on how the story should go is great

armadillo's picture


IT's great, but in the last paragraph, you wrote again our eyes met again. OTher than that, it's awesome!