Comments please????? This is fairly good....I think...

Icarus's picture

we're in your bedroom
tired and out of breath
it's quiet.
i lay there
listening to you breathe.
the bed squeaks
and you rise.
you tell me this can't go on
as you slip your shirt
over your head.
you tell me you're tired
of the secrecy and lies.
i rise
pretending i didn't hear.
a stray curl has fallen
in your face.
i reach for you
but you stop my hand
and hold it.
sky blue meets forest green
and i understand.
my chest tightens and
i lose myself.
your eyes cloud
with tears.
before i can brush them away
you bruise my lips with
one last kiss.
and then....
you're gone.
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I know it sucks ass, but I needed some sort of outlet for this insane crush I have on this senior I don't even know the name of.

Comments

Duncan's picture

IT DOESN'T SUCK! IT'S AWESOME

IT DOESN'T SUCK! IT'S AWESOME!!!! I LOVE IT!

Icarus's picture

awwww, thank you. :)

awwww, thank you. :)

3,600 seconds in an hour.
86, 400 seconds in a day.
3,15,36,000 seconds in a year.
How many seconds until I find you?

Hobbit's picture

wow

that is really great...I'm not a poetry critic or anything, but I like it. btw, insane crushes suck, but I guess in a way it makes life exciting. I have a crush on one of my best friends (she's a girl, I'm a girl, idk if either of us are lesbians) and a couple of other guys who can be a pain in the butt
cheers and happy poetry
randomperson