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the mouse that roared's picture

I breathe in beautiful girl, sparkle, all through swishing skirts and touching arms and swirling twirling weight--

Air is a balloon filling in my chest, too big too fast for my ribs and muscles, too tight, wedging into every crevice,

Pushing up against my throat, hitting a wall at my lips.

I smile, closed lips, at him with the begging eyes, smile and bury my face in his neck as her skirt spins by--

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my heart it pitter patters's picture

that is a gorgeous poem. the

that is a gorgeous poem. the imagery mixed with the emotion comes out in just theright formula. the way it begins with such a simple happiness, and then there is the panic, and then in the end it feels liek a mixture of the two (sorry if i'm interpreting this wrong, i know some people freak over that...)...it's beautiful. i'm in awe of you.

once time is lit, it will burn whether or not you're breathing it in. even after smoke becomes air there is the memory of smoke. -david levithan

the mouse that roared's picture

Aw thanks :)

And of course you are free to interpret it however you like. I don't own my poetry more than anyone else owns theirs.

Are you hanging on to something useless just because you think it's beautiful?
--William Zinsser

Trinity88's picture

i love it. *I shut my e

i love it.

*I shut my eyes and all the world drops dead, i lift my lids and all is born again. I think i made you up inside my head*

rowie's picture

thats really something. you s

thats really something. you should be really proud of it, it made me smile and more importantly it made me think.

--i used to be a tomboy, now im a full grown lesbian--

**you must be the change you wish to see in the world**

niks121997's picture

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I'll add my "I like this" comment. I like it. :)

"Life's under no obligation to give us what we expect. We take what we get and are thankful that it is no worse than it is."

"All that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream."