What he did to her

victoria2995's picture

he took a gun
and took it to school he thought it would be fun
he shot me not once but twice
because he was sick of acting nice
he had been nice for far to long
he thought he had to prove he was strong
but everyone loved her so
they never wanted her to go
so now they cry
for her and wish he would die
now he is alone with no friends
and he thinks that no one understands
but they all know know what the truth is
that its all his fault shes dead
now they all wish HE was dead..

what do u think if it?

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Gerardo's picture

Good

Good, but did you base it off of something that happened in your experience or just something that happens in that situation?

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No pain.

No worry.

No suffering.

Heaven.

jomari_15's picture

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hey u shud do that poem a song it woud go perfectly in a song...

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the ghost's picture

I got to say

I just love your poems!

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent-Eleanor Roosevelt

victoria2995's picture

lol thank you the ghost. that

lol thank you the ghost. that inspires me a TON more to write more i personly think that this poem kind of sucked i think i was having an off day but i dont know... and no its not based on an expeirence of mine. most of my poetry does come from my expeirences but not this one.