GLM Poem - Carols

Uncertain's picture

Your First Name: Max
Your Oasis Name: Uncertain
Your Age: 15
City/ Country: Auckland, New Zealand
Your Gender: Male
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Dancing, singing in their rebirth
They are coming!
Praising, blessing in this renaissance
They are coming!

Together they descend from the realm of glory!
People, give up your edge
People, let go your anger
Together we ascend to the realm of glory!

Grow your wings to leave your blood-stained ground
Enlighten your vision for brighter afar
Fly sky high to smilingly cry!
Open your visions, you shall not fear!

We arrive and march as the advent children!
Family, ready yourselves for their deliverance
Family, leave no grudge to prepare for love
We come and stay as the advent children!

Dancing, singing in their rebirth
They are coming!
Praising, blessing in this renaissance
They are coming!

whateversexual_llama's picture

What a vision... I love the

What a vision... I love the drive behind this. I feel like it could use a really steady, over-emphasis on the syllables, to make it feel like it's marching towards where this vision brings you... do you know what I mean? This is a great start, though. ^.^ I can see this as being really amazing with very very even, steady lines. March, march, march to the dawn.

Whatever I did, I didn't do it.