This is for an English assignment and it's only a rough draft. Sketch, in words, a person who does not know you are watching them. Any comments, critiques, suggestions etc. are greatly appreciated.
To the Girl in the Green Sweater
You're sitting in the row behind me me in the auditorium
wearing a sweater the colour of olives
no, not quite olives, like olives and lichen and some other deeper thing, like the confidence rolling off you in waves is stiched into the yarn of your sweater
Your're sitting in the row behind me with your knees pointing opposite directions like the boys sit in class with your sleeves pushed up & the edge of your t-shirt showing above the V of your collar and your light brown hair cut in a mohawk but not put up
which always looks messy except for it looks intentional on you, soft, & not like you ran out of the house late with not enough time
The green of your sweater reflects in your hair & all that green makes me think your legs are trees rooting you to the ground as you slouch in your chair with easy grace.
I can't see your eyes from here but they haven't seen me twisted in my seat to watch you while your mouth has been moving this whole time talking to your friend in the seat next to you &
I try to read your lips in scientific observation and I wonder what they taste like
Are they young and green too? Does that green reach your heart?
When they call your name you strut up the aisle, the steps to the stage, and make me think I can't be the only one to have noticed you in this whole theater, with that undefinable green shooting out from you.
When they take your picture you strike a pose like they said to, you don't shy away
stand there with your hip jutted out, chin raised, big grin on your face so that no one can tell whether you're doing it in irony
Then bound down the steps again and take your seat, and in a minute you're just the girl in the undefinable green sitting in the row behind me in this auditorium.
Do I say "and" too much? I'm still working on where to put line breaks because at this point I think there aren't enough.